Black Ghost

Isn't that a bit harsh? XD

More! More! The suspense is mounting! MM

Not sure what to make of this...but great job! :?

It was absolutely breathtaking. I don't thing there's anything else to be said, but I do think that the epilogue was sort of a neccesity, to finally prove to the ...

The part about Pat Buchanan was the best. :lol: MM

Alright, here's the rewrite for the prologue. I'll leave the original one up for comparisons. :P And I actually had to force myself to write this, which meant it came ...

Sorry, sometimes I'm not too clear. Adam had never been a good liar, All I meant is that this bit is enough to tell us that he's lying. You don't ...

I always knew YWS would stir up some international conflict. XD

Thanks a lot, Shadowtwit. :D My diction can use a good kick sometimes. XD -Tony

Though I don't critique poetry much, I'm pretty sure the poem should speak for itself.

“She’s always talking about church and crap!” Paul said exasperatedly. Start the story from here, like Ares said. You should always start with action, not an infodump for half a ...

O.o Thanks for catching that. I missed a very important piece of dialogue. The devil is supposed to tell him that he will come after three years to take his ...

Ah, one sentence like the one you added is enough. As long as you have some kind of hook, it makes it better. Hope that helps, Tony

Such a disturbing story...yet awesome at the same time. Perfect example of Quiet Horror XD.

I would suggest at least hinting at a conlfict in this...just to keep the reader interested.